In some countries it is traditional for men to work and women to stay at home to look after the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
For some countries, men have to work to make money and women must stay at home and take care of children.
For
Suggestion
In
From
my view, I would say
this
Linking Words
traditional
Suggestion
tradition
has both benefits and drawbacks, but I believe the tendency has more lots of
good
Suggestion
more good
points than bad points. Most of the men are very strong, they can even stand under lots of pressure in the work environment.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the majority of
man
Suggestion
men
shows
Suggestion
show
their love quietly and rarely cry. Women are different, they are gentle and good at
express
Suggestion
expressing
their
feeling
Suggestion
feelings
.
This
Linking Words
is the reason why children want to closer
with
Suggestion
to
them than men and women can take care of children.
For instance
Linking Words
, in a family, children tend to gravitate with their mother. It is easy to understand that mother
make
Suggestion
makes
has made
is making
children feel so loved and the father is always strict and even taciturn. The fact that the strong character of the man is possible for working to make money and protect the people they love. And women can make sure their children live happily and healthily
by
Suggestion
with
the concern of them. Admittedly, there are some minor disadvantages to live in
this
Linking Words
traditional style. Men are used to hiding their
feeling but
Suggestion
feelings, but
feelings but
sometimes
this
Linking Words
feeling break out and they hard to control their temperature. By the way, they can make hurt their wife and children. Women just suffer the pain of body or even spirit because they depend on the fiance ability of their husband. I used to hear the sad story of my friend about her family.
Argument
Suggestion
The argument
of her parents is never stopping just because her father is so
impatient
of great significance or value
important
and her mother is so weak. In conclusion, while there are a few disadvantages, I believe the good points are greater than bad points. Men and women can help each other to build up a happy family.
Submitted by Jenny on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: