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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have spent time living in that country. To what extent do you agree?

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The bar chart and table provide information about a country’s
export
 revenues from five groups of products in 2015 and 2016. It is noticeable that
export
 earnings in all but one of the five product fields increased over the period shown. While Petroleum products were the highest earnings
export
 in both years, the
textiles
Suggestion
textile
 industry witnessed the most significant growth in earnings. It is clear that the
export
 of Petroleum products rose from about $61
billion
 in 2015 to $63
billion
 in 2016, which was an increase of 3%, followed by the engineered goods had a positive grown
with
Suggestion
to
 8,5%. The years between 2015 and 2016 witnessed a sharp rise in
export
 revenues from Textiles, with 15.24% from roughly $25
billion
 to over $30
billion
.
By contrast
, the figure for Agricultural products was nearly uncharged, which remained stable at over 30$
billion
.
Finally
, Gems and jewellery had a slight decreased
of
Suggestion
by
 5.18%
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