Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays people are becoming totally dependent on their jobs. They concentrate too much on working and they pay no attention to other activities
such
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as exercising to keep their body fit, especially
at
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in
middle age. The consequences are
obviosly
unmistakably ('plain' is often used informally for 'plainly')
obviously
present because they end up not living a healthy life with a considerable high level of stress. There are several
reason
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reasons
which lead to
this
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issue.
First
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of all is the stress about
acomplishing
put in effect
accomplishing
all tasks given by the employers. It puts them in a lot of
preasure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
pleasure
. The
increasingly
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increasing
increased
demand for office work is a reason to expose people to a sedentary life. Office workers get lazy and mentally tired. They end up gaining weight too. Inactivity becomes a habit at
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moment and it is
dificult
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
to get involved in physical activities and to go out of the personal comfort zone.
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, there
are
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is
a lot of solutions to solve
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matter. It can be achieved by company policies.
For example
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, there are a lot companies which offer yoga short classes for their employees during the working hours. They have created working breaks to give the possibility to their staff to benefit from yoga classes.
In
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addition these
Accept comma addition
addition, these
companies could offer gym
anual
completing its life cycle within a year
annual
subscriptions or bike rental subscriptions in order to give them the opportunity to exercise. They can create sports competitions between sections of their company.
This
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could be a good way to promote physical activities for the workers. In conclusion, I would say that physical activity is fundamental for our health. It
also
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provides us the opportunity to be more productive during the working hours which could have a good impact on the company we are working for.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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