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People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. Which are these problems? Should government encourage people to move to small regional areas?

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Life in a metropolitan
city
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 is quite different to a life in a regional area. Cities and small regional areas, both have its own challenges and benefits. In my opinion, government should encourage people to move to regional areas.
To begin
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 with, a large number of people are moving out from villages and desire to settle down in metro cities, which in turn increases the population of the
city
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. They decide to relocate as they are of the opinion that they can find a job with a decent salary.
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, a job in a
city
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 for the person, will in turn lead to a better life for his family as well. Having said that, the metro cities keep running round the clock.
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, Mumbai is a
city
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 that never sleeps, which has its own repercussions.
On the other hand
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, people from cities are prone to more diseases as compared to people from regional areas. The reason behind
this
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 is a simple way of living, nutritious food, clean and less polluted air, so on and so forth. To illustrate, a recent study suggests that a person can live for 100 plus years who has been in a regional
areas
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area
, whereas a person from a
city
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 may have a shorter span of life. In conclusion, people can choose to live in cities for earning a good fortune in the initial years,
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however government
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however, government
 authorities should motivate people to settle in rural areas for the remaining years, which will help both the individual and the authorities.
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