Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Firstly

, I totally agree with the phrase - Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. In each and every field, we have too many choices. Let it be

studies

Suggestion

studied

, purchase of any goods or products etc. To discuss few electronic gadgets

firstly

, I take Mobile phones. There are different mobile phones.

For example

, Nokia, Samsung, iPhone, Red me, Realme etc.

Secondly

, Laptops.

For example

, Sony, Toshiba, DELL etc.

Thirdly

, Desktops. Same companies which produce laptops, manufacture desktops

also

. Not only

this

, there are many, many and many. If we take bikes there are number of choices.

Firstly

, Gear bikes and

secondly

, non-gear bikes. When we talk about companies who manufacture bikes and mopeds, there are many.

For instance

, Bajaj, TVS, Suzuki etc. When we talk about studies, well know to all people, well known educational streams are engineering, medical, finance and accounting, civil and administrative services. Actually, again in engineering itself, there are so many branches.

For instance

, Computer Science, Electrical and Electronics, Chemical, Civil, mechanical, piping etc.

This

is discussed, we

further

can take on to

next level

Suggestion

the next level

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

182 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

many pearents in Vietnam invest heavily into their child's education hoping for the best. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

Some schools are opting to save money by eliminating art classes. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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