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WITH AN INCREASING POPULATION COMMUNICATING VIA THE INTERNET AND TEXT MESSAGING, FACE TO FACE COMMUNICATION WILL BECOME A THING OF THE PAST. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE?

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It is believed by
group
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a group
the group
groups
 of people that sophisticated technology, while population is being
in
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on
 a rise, has led people to leave non-virtual
communication
 and prefer to relate to others through the
internet
 or text messaging. It seems to that
face
 to
face
communication
remains and
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remains, and
 always used in wider society, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, according to the stability of the
internet
,
communication
 through the
internet
 relies on the signal. No matter how palatable the application of text messaging in the
internet
 is, or how
delightfully
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delightful
 people use it, abominable
internet’s
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internet
 connectivity will make them in a vain for those who do not possess stabile connection
such
 as being in environmentally disadvantaged locations. Residents living in
remote area
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remote areas
a remote area
such
 as
tribe
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a tribe
 of Papua Nugini known for being difficult in
this
 way can be
salient example
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a salient example
 of
this
 case. My
second
 reason comes from the respect of effectiveness. Relating to people via Zoom, a widely-known application currently used for some higher education institutions to run online learning due to
coronavirus
 outbreak has led a field-research to reveal that mainly Indonesian students are not seriously communicating to one another, especially to teachers. The ineffectiveness of
this
 virtual-contact foresees people to remain and always use
face
 to
face
communication
. The opponents of
this
 view consider that non-virtual
communication
 possesses limitation of space, a virtual-
communication ease
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communication, ease
 people to relate to one another everywhere and every time easily without depending on spaces or places. Despite
this
, there is a wide disparity of access of the
internet
 worldwide, because not all people are able, or feel comfortably relating to others in
this
 way.
Thus
, non-virtual
communication
 seems to be much more effective and accessible. To reiterate, even non-virtual contact has limitation of space, the stability of
internet’s
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internet
 connectivity and a field-research’s reveal combine together to make a
face
 to
face
communication
 remain and always used in wider society.
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