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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done?

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As living standard moves up to a new height, it comes as no surprise to see millennials spending excessive time on routes to entertain themselves outside
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, whether that or other factors are playing a part in the lack of
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’ concentration still has not reached a clear scientific consensus. In
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 will be pointed out. Admittedly, one of the sources that trigger
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’ school life is the abounding entertainment platforms in which
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 can spend hours bingeing
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before bedtime. In fact, it is the norm these days for youngsters to access social networks or video games without much parental surveillance. Usually, they would spend hours before bed
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 video games,
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 some of their favorite TV shows, and swap texts with their peers, which too often are neglected as
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 seem to deem them no threats to children’s academic life.
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, they often show up in class with bloodshot eyes and divided
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 that restrains them from digesting lessons going on before them.
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, it should not be said that the root of the problem solely rests on the
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 themselves since
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 play a part in that as well. Normally
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 would teach their lessons in a theoretical method that undeniably can be mundane in certain moments should
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 barely catching up with new knowledge
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 passed on. What’s more, theory usually is regarded as “can be discarded” later on in life,
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,
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, for sure, would not pay close
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 to the teacher if not
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reprimanded
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. Apart from these reasons,
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’ affinity for Certain subjects might be a plausible cause. It should be noted that humans naturally have a propensity to play
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, they would only pay full
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 in classes that trigger their enthusiasm
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 remaining nonchalant towards uninterested subjects. To counter these, there are several methods
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 be applied but of course with the cooperation
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, children and educators. First and foremost,
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 should impose a clear rule on the online
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 of their offspring. If the online hours were reduced,
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 would not have any other way but to turn in early or to prepare for school, which can aid them later on during classes.
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 should conduct classes in a jovial manner, with colourful presentations or short stories to kick off the class.
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’
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 and maintain their level of
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 for the entire class.
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,
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 and
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 should encourage them to consider every subject equally given each one to
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 extent can benefit one later on whether in
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 sense or social sense. All in all,
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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