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Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

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Many people think that youngsters are having so much leisure
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 and
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time
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 could be spent with more
school
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work
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. I think that
school
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work
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 is crucial for
children but
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children, but
 spending free
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 on other activities may be more beneficial for them. Some people suggest that children should spend their free
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 on
school
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work
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this
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 suggestion is beneficial for their grades,
this
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 can lead to some problems.
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, children who are forced to do more homework in their free
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 are becoming less sociable.
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 more
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 increases their stress level so allowing them to be free in their leisure
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 may lead to an increase in their happiness. I think that children should spend their free
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 with their friends in the parks or they can spend their
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 on activities that they enjoy doing the most. Playing in the park with their friends contributes to their social skills in a positive way.
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, they can do a variety of things that they enjoy
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 as, playing with their toys or drawing pictures. These activities may increase their creativity. Another benefit of having free
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 without extra
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work
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 could be that children may find hobbies that are enjoyable to do. So there are many fun and enjoyable activities that kids can do in their free
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 to keep them fruitfully occupied. In conclusion, even though studying for
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work
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 in children’s free
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 could be useful, there are
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 negative sides to that choice and spending
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 on other activities like playing with friends or spending
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 on art could have more positive impacts on them.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unstructured free time
  • creativity
  • mental health development
  • extracurricular activities
  • well-rounded development
  • sports
  • arts
  • social skills
  • family time
  • emotional growth
  • relationship building
  • rest and leisure
  • academic performance
  • burnout
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