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 People will buy a product if it has quality or fulfill their needs. There is no need for advertisement and considered as a form of entertainment.  Do you agree or disagree with it.

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Though most of the folks prefer to buy a goods which meets to their own desires, but they do not give time to impress on any announcement for getting articles. I
full
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fully
 agree with
this
 statement because now a day’s individual does not want to waste their time on watching the publicity and find display as a fun. Some human’s believe that goods will be able to shop for its exhibit. At
first
, in
this
 way they would get low rank material.
For example
, in Asian countries, in Japan as well as China publicized their
product
 all over the world. In spite having
well
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good
 standard they are unable to sale out their
product
 on
whole world
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the whole world
.
However having
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However, having
 well display it is does not mean that it has good value.
That is
 why, individual is investing
for
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in
 getting
product
 on the others country too. Argue, it is better to buy for well goods not only depending on commercial. In opposite view, some
people
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peoples
 opinions that anything should be shopped for his own basic needs with getting publicity. Though, most of the individual
illiterate but
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illiterate, but
 they are obeying the Economist.
For instance
, in European countries, in German,
economist
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the economist
an economist
 said, pay for only well grade things after confirming that it is your real need.
Therefore
, their 99 percent nation used to take only good quality
material but
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material, but
 not even watching
commercial
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the commercial
a commercial
. In
this
 way they got satisfaction against their wishes. Argue it is
crucial idea
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a crucial idea
 for shopping
product
 which
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
fulfilled
fulfils
 their basic needs. In conclusion some human being thinks buying articles should be only for their full filling their basic desires.
Therefore in
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Therefore, in
this
matter they
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matter, they
 are not getting
involve
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involved
 in vein fun. I totally agree with
this
 statement that everyone should wise choose things as invest
in which
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in, which
 would be really full fill their purpose.
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