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Should governments or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools

In these salad days of millennium, it is indispensable to educate children to enlighten their future. Nowadays society is polarized into two groups regarding the notion whether
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government
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the government
 or teachers are responsible for the knowledge which shared with the
school
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. Different people have their distinct mindset.The following paragraphs will shed light on both approaches before making a final note.
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 and foremost, the lion's share of society believes that teachers would accountable for what they teach
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at
 the institute.
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 is because, teacher's approach and attitude would affect the character shaping of students. To cite an example, according to the UNICEF character of primary university student would be affected by a parent's and teacher's attitude. On the flip of the coin, one
school
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 of thought opine that
government
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 is answerable about anything which is taught in the
school
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.
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 is because the ultimate decision comes from the
government
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 about the content of
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school syllabus
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the school syllabus
. For an instance, In India, every five years, new
government
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 releases their education policy about the hall education system.
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 to
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, pedagogical experts are assigned by union to design and draft the curriculum.
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, academy syllabus would developed by the instruction of administrators.
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, In India politics bodies appoint different commissions to study and recommend changes to improve educational quality
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 as Kothari commission, Radhakrishnan commission. In conclusion,
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 there is a conflict about the accountability of what to be taught at the institute level.I personally believe that administrative bodies should be responsible as the final decision is made by the ministry for any changes in the education system.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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