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“Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?”

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 university students spend most of the
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 studying. They should be doing other activities too. Almost all students would benefit from some extra activities along with studies. Personally, I believe that students should spend some
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 doing other activities
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 as sports.
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, their main attention should be on education.
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 with, spending all the
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 with books can lead to many health problems.
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, it can be stressful, which results in depression and in the worst-case scenario suicide.
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, students who spend more
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 with books are not active and usually they have a sedentary lifestyle;
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, they are at risk of being overweight. Simply, all these effects could result in long-term psychological problems and
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 put students under pressure while studying.
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, pupils may not learn social skills as they are not able to spend
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 with friends or go to some other events.
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, allocating some
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 to other activities while studying has some benefits.
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, students gets refreshed after these activities and they can concentrate easily.
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, students’ brains get tired if they study constantly. As an outcome, they feel tired and lack of energy which makes it difficult for them to concentrate all the
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. I believe that students who spend more
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 with books to gain good knowledge but to learn other skills,
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 as teamwork, they must participate in activities like sports.
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, giving some
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 to extra activities does not mean that students have to focus on that, but their main priority should be education. In conclusion,
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 it is necessary to give more
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 to books while studying, I believe that students should take enough
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 out for other activities to avoid any impact on their health, future life, and study.
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, students should avoid overindulgence in extra activities.
Submitted by Manjot kaur on

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