Some people think the best way to solve traffic congestion in cities is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Hello, professor Pursur, my name is
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, I am student 25 on table 5. Today I would like to tell you a traditional Chinese fairy tale, which is called The
Lotus
Lamp. Long long ago,There
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a beautiful goddess called the
Sanshengmu
,
fell
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in love with a mortal, Liu Yanchang. She secretly went down to the mortal world and married him. They lived
happy
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life and had a lovely son named
Chenxiang
. But the happy life did not
last
long, when Liu Yanchang went to Yangzhou to work as an official,
Sanshengmu
was in trouble. Her elder brother,
God
Er-lang
, was very angry with her marriage. "How can a goddess marry a mortal? I will take her back to Heaven!”
Sanshengmu
had a very powerful
lotus
lantern
that nobody could take her back by force.
God
Er-lang
knew the power of the
lotus
lantern
, so he ordered his dog to steal the
lantern
,
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and
then
put
Sanshengmu
under Huashan Mountain. At the age of seven,
Chenxiang
learned his mother's story from
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his neighbors
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neighbors
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. "Mom has been suffering so much! I must go there and rescue her!” “
Chenxiang
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Chen Xiang
, we are mortals. How can we fight against the gods?" his father sighed. Anyway, I will do my best to rescue my mom, "
Chenxiang
said. One day,
Chenxiang
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Chen Xiang
left home for Huashan Mountain without letting his father know.
Chenxiang
met a lot of difficulties on his way. He climbed over the
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mountains, walked across the endless desert, went through the ghost valley and was injured in the thornbushes... But none of these could stop him. A fairy named
God
Thunderbolt was moved by the filial piety of
Chenxiangs'
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saving mother.
God
Thunderbolt decided to help
Chenxiang
and taught
Chenxiang
all kinds of skills.
Chenxiang
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Chen Xiang
was very smart and hard-working. He made great progress. He finished his studies when he was sixteen.
Then
he said goodbye to
God
Thunderbolt and flew to Heaven to fight with
God
Er-lang
. Through unremitting efforts,
Chenxiang
defeated
God
Er-lang
,
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and got the
lotus
lantern
back. After sixteen years
Sanshengmu
finally
met her son. They held each other tightly. At
this
moment the
lotus
lantern
shined again. The world looked so bright and beautiful! From
then
on,
Chenxiang
and his parents lived happily together.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • thirdly
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