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Hello, professor Pursur, my name is

faye

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, I am student 25 on table 5. Today I would like to tell you a traditional Chinese fairy tale, which is called The

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Lamp. Long long ago,There

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a beautiful goddess called the

Sanshengmu

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fell

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who fell

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in love with a mortal, Liu Yanchang. She secretly went down to the mortal world and married him. They lived

happy

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a happy

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life and had a lovely son named

Chenxiang

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. But the happy life did not

last

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long, when Liu Yanchang went to Yangzhou to work as an official,

Sanshengmu

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was in trouble. Her elder brother,

God

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Er-lang

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, was very angry with her marriage. "How can a goddess marry a mortal? I will take her back to Heaven!”

Sanshengmu

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had a very powerful

lotus

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lantern

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that nobody could take her back by force.

God

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Er-lang

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knew the power of the

lotus

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lantern

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, so he ordered his dog to steal the

lantern

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and

then

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put

Sanshengmu

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under Huashan Mountain. At the age of seven,

Chenxiang

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learned his mother's story from

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his neighbors

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neighbors

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. "Mom has been suffering so much! I must go there and rescue her!” “

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Chenxiang

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Chen Xiang

, we are mortals. How can we fight against the gods?" his father sighed. Anyway, I will do my best to rescue my mom, "

Chenxiang

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said. One day,

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Chenxiang

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Chen Xiang

left home for Huashan Mountain without letting his father know.

Chenxiang

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met a lot of difficulties on his way. He climbed over the

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mountains, walked across the endless desert, went through the ghost valley and was injured in the thornbushes... But none of these could stop him. A fairy named

God

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Thunderbolt was moved by the filial piety of

Chenxiangs'

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Chenxiang's

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saving mother.

God

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Thunderbolt decided to help

Chenxiang

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and taught

Chenxiang

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all kinds of skills.

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Chenxiang

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Chen Xiang

was very smart and hard-working. He made great progress. He finished his studies when he was sixteen.

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he said goodbye to

God

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Thunderbolt and flew to Heaven to fight with

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Er-lang

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. Through unremitting efforts,

Chenxiang

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defeated

God

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Er-lang

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and got the

lotus

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lantern

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back. After sixteen years

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finally

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met her son. They held each other tightly. At

this

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moment the

lotus

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lantern

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shined again. The world looked so bright and beautiful! From

then

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on,

Chenxiang

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and his parents lived happily together.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

375 words

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