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Hello, professor Pursur, my name is

faye

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, I am student 25 on table 5. Today I would like to tell you a traditional Chinese fairy tale, which is called The

Lotus

Lamp. Long long ago,There

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a beautiful goddess called the

Sanshengmu

fell

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in love with a mortal, Liu Yanchang. She secretly went down to the mortal world and married him. They lived

happy

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life and had a lovely son named

Chenxiang

. But the happy life did not

last

long, when Liu Yanchang went to Yangzhou to work as an official,

Sanshengmu

was in trouble. Her elder brother,

God

Er-lang

, was very angry with her marriage. "How can a goddess marry a mortal? I will take her back to Heaven!”

Sanshengmu

had a very powerful

lotus

lantern

that nobody could take her back by force.

God

Er-lang

knew the power of the

lotus

lantern

, so he ordered his dog to steal the

lantern

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and

then

put

Sanshengmu

under Huashan Mountain. At the age of seven,

Chenxiang

learned his mother's story from

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his neighbors

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neighbors

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. "Mom has been suffering so much! I must go there and rescue her!” “

Chenxiang

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Chen Xiang

, we are mortals. How can we fight against the gods?" his father sighed. Anyway, I will do my best to rescue my mom, "

Chenxiang

said. One day,

Chenxiang

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Chen Xiang

left home for Huashan Mountain without letting his father know.

Chenxiang

met a lot of difficulties on his way. He climbed over the

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mountains, walked across the endless desert, went through the ghost valley and was injured in the thornbushes... But none of these could stop him. A fairy named

God

Thunderbolt was moved by the filial piety of

Chenxiangs'

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saving mother.

God

Thunderbolt decided to help

Chenxiang

and taught

Chenxiang

all kinds of skills.

Chenxiang

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Chen Xiang

was very smart and hard-working. He made great progress. He finished his studies when he was sixteen.

Then

he said goodbye to

God

Thunderbolt and flew to Heaven to fight with

God

Er-lang

. Through unremitting efforts,

Chenxiang

defeated

God

Er-lang

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and got the

lotus

lantern

back. After sixteen years

Sanshengmu

finally

met her son. They held each other tightly. At

this

moment the

lotus

lantern

shined again. The world looked so bright and beautiful! From

then

on,

Chenxiang

and his parents lived happily together.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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