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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..........., You should write at least 150 words.

#bus #service #reliability #area #two #weeks #manager #company #addresses
Dear Sir, I am writing to bring your attention
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 issues with the
bus
 service is operated by The Transport Department. Over two weeks services are not on time and that outturn late on desired destinations. As I said, the
bus
 service is responsible for my resign to being reached late at the office. The
bus
 driver is responsible for running the
bus
 30 minutes behind the schedule which
end
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 to reached
office
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the office
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30 minute
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 delay and that affects my work performance.Another concern is that the seats are
also
 torn in the
bus
 that
cause
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our clothes
get
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 stained and which looks embarrassed. I request
to
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The Transport Department to take prompt action regarding my affair . So that, the problem we are facing will break down soon and people get satisfactory results reaching on time at
work place
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also
 help us to perform better. The seat should be replaced or repaired so that, our clothes remain
spot free
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. I hope you take my complaint seriously and take strict actions to give us
better
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 solution and punctual on a daily schedule and in the future we will never face
such
 issues.
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Your
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 faithfully, ABC
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