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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Most of the countries in the
world
 are using nuclear weapons to deter the enemy resulting the peace in the
world
 as well as an
affortable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
 and
pollution free source
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a pollution free source
the pollution free source
 of
energy
. I completely agree that due to enormous benefits nuclear
energy
 offers to the mankind, it
certainly overshadow
Suggestion
certainly overshadows
 it's disadvantages. In
this
 essay, we will discuss about one disadvantage of nuclear power
,
Accept space
,
 measures to overcome it as well as
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 benefits to the environment.
Firstly
, the one threat with these powers is uncontrolled usage to destroy the human. There plenty of efforts are made
acorss
to the opposite side
across
 the globe to monitor the responsible utilisation of the nuclear
technology which
Accept comma addition
technology, which
 includes
formation
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the formation
 of
world
 organisations
such
 as
United Nations
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the United Nations
,
United Security council
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the United Security Council
the United Security council
 who acts as a
gurdian
a person who cares for persons or property
guardian
 of the
world
 peace which were formed after the lessons learned from
World
 War II. Every nation in the
world
 is aware about the lasting impact of irresponsible usage of it
on
Suggestion
to
 the mankind, after the attack on Hiroshima and Nagasaki which has affected the life of the people for the generations.
Secondly
, nuclear
energy
 is eco-friendly. There is no
second
 thought that every nation
need
Suggestion
needs
 fuel to fulfil daily needs of their subjects which results in burning fossil fuels like petrol, natural gas which
emmits
expel (gases or odors)
emits
emit
 carbon di-oxide in the atmosphere.
Furthermore
, increased level of carbon di-oxide has ignited the problems like global warming,
shifing
continuously varying
shifting
 of the seasons. Nuclear
energy
 will provide the best alternative to the traditional fossil fuel conserving the environment and providing the solution of human need of
energy
. In conclusion, if every nation
use
Suggestion
uses
 the nuclear
energy
 responsibly
then
 it will act as
boon
Suggestion
a boon
 to the mankind along with preserving the environment and maintain the peace and harmony.
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