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Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers.

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Significant people start earning
in
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at
young age
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a young age
, and contribute their entire life for a
company
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 or various companies. In
this
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 journey, the main factor affects them is a
work
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satisfaction
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. In
this
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 essay I will discuss about different aspects and reality of
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work
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worker
satisfaction
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 with the conclusion at the end. To initiate with, there are manifold elements of
work
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satisfaction
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.
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, the main reason is environment of
work
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 and other co-workers. Everyone wants to
work
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 in a peaceful and positive place, which directly affect to the output of
work
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, and
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 helpful to maintain the good quality of
work
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.
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, relationship with colleagues is
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 an important element, which should be helping each other, because team
work
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 gives more accurate and healthy output than individual
work
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.
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, earning and encouragement are other vital factors. An employee works fulfil requirements of their family, and he or she should be paid on time. Employees require inspiration for their contribution and hard
work
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, which would help them to improve their capability. As an instance, in India, most companies give a bonus to their workers every year on the festival of Diwali to motivate and thank them for their hard
work
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.
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, the facts about job
satisfaction
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 are different from expectations of people.
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 of all, there is flourishing competition in between workers of
same
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the same company
company
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, which results in less output and lack of teamwork, and
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 introduce various differences between each other.
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, the relation between owner and employee is
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 a factor, because some owners have trust issues on their staff, which convert into dissatisfaction and people resign from their job. Another affective reason is salary of people. The director of the
company
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 wants perfect and time to time
work
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, but do not want to increase the salary, which is depressing for employees. To illustrate, in Dubai, there are same wages for experienced and fresher people in
same companies
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the same companies
.
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, some people continue their job because of compulsion. To conclude, each
company
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 should take care of their team members for
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satisfaction
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the satisfaction
 of their contribution, because
happy and healthy employee
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the happy and healthy employee
a happy and healthy employee
 is a key to successful companies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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