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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Every
year several
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year, several
 languages die out. Some people think that
this
 is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the
world
.
o
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O
 what extent do you agree or disagree with
this
 opinion? Every year, several languages died out.
Although
 some think that
this
 isn't much of a problem, since having fewer
language
 means easier communication, some
also
 fear that it will have an impact on the diversity of culture as a whole. I personally think that it won't have a significant impact on our society. On one hand, it is undeniable that each
language
represent
Suggestion
represents
 the identity of the tribe or
country
 that spoke them. You could say that it is their face, the uniqueness that only they possess. It doesn't only serve as an identity either. Many of the myths and traditions in the
world
 almost if not
always be
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always, be
 written in
ancient
Suggestion
an ancient language
ancient languages
the ancient language
language
, so to lose the
language
 could mean the death of a
certaint
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certain t
 page in history But
on the other hand
, the lack of diversity in
language
have
Suggestion
has also made
had also made
also
 made communication between
country
 and
country
 way easier. International diplomatic and business work are easier to be carried out,
culture
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the culture
 of each
country
are
Suggestion
is
 better explained, and the unity of the
world
are strengthen
Suggestion
is strengthening
, which prevent the possibility of a war
happenning
an event that happens
happening
 Overall, I agree with the opinion that having fewer languages in the
world
 will make life easier. Because of the few languages, different culture can be shared way more easily and international work can
also
 be easily carried, which brings
benefit
Suggestion
benefits
 to the
world
 as a whole
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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