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NOWADAYS MANY PEOPLE CHOOSE TO BE SELF EMPLOYED , RATHER THAN TO WORK FOR A COMPANY OR ORGANIZATION. WHY MIGHT THIS BE THE CASE ? WHAT COULD BE THE DISADVANTAGES OF BEING SELF EMPLOYED?

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Nowadays, there are a lot of emerging jobs that might be
self
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employment
Suggestion
employed
 in large amounts because most of people tend to enjoy with their flexible time which they can manage by themselves.
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,
this
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 type of works may be not sustainable as same as a big company.
This
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 essay will explore
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
 of
this
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 statement.
Firstly
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, some may say that
self
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 employed provides them plenty of time as they can do their job whenever they want, there is no any policy to comply with.
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,
this
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 group will find it more comfortable and can stay longer with their loved one.
However
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, these
job
Suggestion
jobs
 are insecure as they need to manage by themselves.
For example
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, there is a report from Thailand
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market that a number of unemployed graduates have been rising from 7.13% to 9.31% during corona virus pandemics.
Secondly
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, working by themselves will find it difficult if
they lack of experience
Suggestion
they lack experience
 in their task, so these workers can be bankrupt and become debt makers.
For instance
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, my friend decided to quit her full time career and started to do hair salon shop, so she
need
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needs
 to deal with everything,
such
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 as a rental area, colleagues, and monthly payments.
Moreover
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, she found that some coworkers cheated her money.
Consequently
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, she needed to finish hair salon business and came back to work in the previous organization again. To sum up,
self
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 employment has its pros and cons, so
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
leavers
lovers
 should consider whether to do it by
self
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 or not in order to prevent the failure and become being debt.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • freedom
  • pursue
  • passion
  • interest
  • income
  • financial success
  • control
  • working hours
  • work-life balance
  • empowerment
  • ownership
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial challenges
  • isolation
  • social interaction
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • deadlines
  • supervisors
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