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most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial to what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #world #globalisation #development
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The word
globalisation
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 is itself a meaningful word which means import or export between the nations and
also
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 to set up new companies with their branching in different nations or countries. In
this
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 essay, the discussion about
globalisation
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 having a negative or a positive effect. According
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 personal views, the
globalisation
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 shows a more positive development. In today's growing
world gaining
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world, gaining
 education and getting employed is
of
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on
about
 the main concern and the
globalisation
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 had made people earn their
living like
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living, like
 multinational companies
setup
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set up
 in various countries providing people with new ideas techniques and
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 help our nation to develop as a whole. Getting companies assemble in other countries as up in the economic face of the country. Most of MNCs set their companies and invest in a country can
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have
 low paid
labours
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labour
, raw materials and a good place to work on new techniques. According to the fact, China is at the top having large number of MNCs set
up followed
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up, followed
 by India as it stands
at
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as
 the
second
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 most. Some people agree that
globalisation
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 has a negative effect because due to
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a large number
the large number
 of the companies or trades messed up their lives. But as a general public view
globalisation
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 has shown
more positive effect
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a more positive effect
 than negative. Concluding that
globalisation
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 has become a very obvious part of our
lives
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life
 and personally I can't deny the fact that it helped many nations to evolve economically as well as for resources too.
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