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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In the modern world globalization is having a huge
impact
 every
country
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country's
countries
 economy around the world. The benefits are obvious. The market boundaries have fallen and the international
marketing
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market
markets
 is growing bigger as well as expanding every year. If we take a look at the big picture it may seem
wonderful but
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wonderful, but
 we have to dig deep through the details to meet the pros and cons of
this
 development. On one hand, some people consider international marketing as an invasion and by taking into consideration some aspects they
maybe
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may be
 right. It can have a negative
impact
in
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on
 local companies because they cannot compete with international brands even if their products could be better in terms of quality. Another negative
impact
 could be on our traditions as well as our habits.
one
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One
 example that supports
this
 idea is about the beverages.
For instance
, in my country about 30 years ago we used to serve home-made lemonades whereas today it isn’t used anymore because Coca
cola
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Cola
 or Fanta have replaced it.
On the other hand
, we have to consider the benefits of international marketing for every country. A great possibility for economical growth. Great
impact
 on labour market.
For example
, Coca
cola
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Cola
 factory in my town has over 200 employees. Another
example could
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example, could
 be the advertising sector. Big international companies create high
standarts
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standards
 so the quality of commercials would improve much more. In conclusion, I would say that we have to accept the new rules that globalization is imposing
to
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in
 the world as well as being flexible and being
adopted
changed in order to improve or made more fit for a particular purpose
adapted
 to them. We have to be smart and open minded to turn even the negative effects in our favour. Rejecting or confronting these rules wouldn’t make our lives easier.
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