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Some people say that te only rason fr /earning a forign language Is In order to tvel to or wor in a freign countr. Other say that tese ar not the only rasons why someone should lear a frign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, children usually learn another
language
 when they approach middle
school
, even though some experts believe its better occurs in primary institution. It seems to me that a foreign
language
 should be taught to our children in elder stages rather than the younger one It is undeniable that when young children learn another
language
 like English,
in particular
, they will easily integrate into the global world faster and they will be more intelligent, adaptable, flexible and versatile.
However
, they will go through some mental issues tongue. For some kids learning another
language
 at an early age may be ineffective or they may forfeit their cultural identity. Learning another
language
 might bring a large reservoir of benefits to the child, but it requires huge investments that not many families can afford.
On the other hand
, learning another
language
 at an early age may contribute to the children’s future,
for example
, they will land a great chance to work for multi-national companies, be paid higher and have access to diverse sources of knowledge.
However
, other subjects are more important at that age. We should allow them to focus on the basic subjects which require them to put much effort and time-consuming.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 can start to learn a foreign
language
 after they have established and understood the concept of primary
school
.
For example
, they may enjoy learning
language
 through games and debate, present a current issue, as well as established a social conversation with other people from different locations either locally or internationally. In conclusion, I strongly believe that children may begin their education in a foreign
language
 at secondary
school
 rather than primary
school
 because the benefits are outweighing the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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