Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People are suffering with multiple
dieases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
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disease
because of eating habit
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Researchers argue that society life is in danger
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since they are preferring
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diet
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some section debated that will
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issue resolved if individuals get knowledge about choosing healthy
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masses
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the masses
need to be more conscious towards daily intake
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I will discuss the both views in
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Prepackaged
food
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is available at every
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time, which
pursues an interest of the mankind to eat
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it requires less effort to prepare at home rather than cooked meal
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Secondly
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used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
are fatigue and immunity of the professional have been become
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weakened
due to official's work load on
body
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the body
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they are not capable to digest the
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enclosed in a package or protective covering
packaged
food
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Apparently
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It leads to sick frequently while eating
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a latest study shown by
Health department
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the Health Department
the Health department
that masses are struggling with many health implications because of excessive consumption of frozen diet
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people are eating canned meals.
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Consequently
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it makes difficult to digest and lead to dangerous symptoms.
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problem
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the problem
problems
can be resolved if
benefits
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the benefits
of the vegans
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are highlighted
while classes
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folks
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are
too responsible to consider the advantages when they buy or eat fast
food
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Canada government
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the Canadian government
Canadian government
has mentioned the effects of fry foods at various places so that customers could able to know the upcoming challenges which may be arisen once they eat
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Thus
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increasing trend amid individuals to prefer processed
food
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can be avoided by showing the various diseases
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which comes from
pizazz
Italian open pie made of thin bread dough spread with a spiced mixture of e.g. tomato sauce and cheese
pizzas
and burgers. In conclusion, undoubtedly teenagers are getting sick by unknown diseases
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Since they are consuming fibre and which disturbs the immune system
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Education
should be provide
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should provide
should be provided
to the people about the fruits to stimulate an interest.
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