"Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society?"

In recent times, there is an increasing trend in the way individuals spend less
time
in their houses.
This
may be due to their
work
schedules and distance from their
work
places. One of the
reason
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reasons
why people hardly have
time
to spend in the abodes is due to their responsibilities in their
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
. A lot of them are so tied up with
work
and they may have
deadline
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a deadline
deadlines
to meet so they will have to stay back after regular
work
hours to finish up.
For example
, a person that has a proposal to submit the
next
day may decide to start back at
work
so as to avoid distractions at
home
to ensure that it is ready when needed Another reason why individuals spend less
time
at
home
is because of the distance from their house to their
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
, most of them live very far from where they
work
and
this
is
as a result
of lack of funds to get apartments close to their
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
due to high cost or bad roads that makes their homes very difficult to assess. Not spending
time
at
home
as much as possible affects these people in severe ways.
Firstly
, it leads to a reduced quality of life due to stress, lack of rest and
insufficent
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
sleep. Scientists
has recorded
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have recorded
that sleep and rest rejuvenates the system and improve mental
health so when
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health, so when
an individual lacks it, they may start having mental disorders and negative psychological issues.
Furthermore
, spending less
time
at
home
can deprive a person of some family love and oneness. It is very paramount for individuals to socialise with family, friends and people
around but
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around, but
if there is no
time
to build these relationships,
such
individual might end up alone, depressed with no one to share burdens with. In conclusion,
although
there are several reasons why people don't spend
time
in their houses, it is important that they consider the effects
such
as low quality of life and the possibility of mental stress and adjust their lives positively.
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