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"Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society?"

#people #time #home #*causes* #*effects* #individuals #society
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In recent times, there is an increasing trend in the way individuals spend less
time
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 in their houses.
This
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 may be due to their
work
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 schedules and distance from their
work
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 places. One of the
reason
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reasons
 why people hardly have
time
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 to spend in the abodes is due to their responsibilities in their
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work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
. A lot of them are so tied up with
work
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 and they may have
deadline
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a deadline
deadlines
 to meet so they will have to stay back after regular
work
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 hours to finish up.
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, a person that has a proposal to submit the
next
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 day may decide to start back at
work
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 so as to avoid distractions at
home
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 to ensure that it is ready when needed Another reason why individuals spend less
time
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 at
home
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 is because of the distance from their house to their
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
, most of them live very far from where they
work
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 and
this
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 is
as a result
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 of lack of funds to get apartments close to their
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 due to high cost or bad roads that makes their homes very difficult to assess. Not spending
time
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 at
home
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 as much as possible affects these people in severe ways.
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, it leads to a reduced quality of life due to stress, lack of rest and
insufficent
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
 sleep. Scientists
has recorded
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have recorded
 that sleep and rest rejuvenates the system and improve mental
health so when
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health, so when
 an individual lacks it, they may start having mental disorders and negative psychological issues.
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, spending less
time
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 at
home
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 can deprive a person of some family love and oneness. It is very paramount for individuals to socialise with family, friends and people
around but
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around, but
 if there is no
time
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 to build these relationships,
such
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 individual might end up alone, depressed with no one to share burdens with. In conclusion,
although
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 there are several reasons why people don't spend
time
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 in their houses, it is important that they consider the effects
such
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 as low quality of life and the possibility of mental stress and adjust their lives positively.
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