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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The health service is an important need of our life.Health is a human being's most valuable asset which should be on the top of any country's priority list. As far as my view is concerned
,
Accept space
,
I will shed light on
this
 topic in subsequent paragraphs. I agree that, every country should take care of residents by providing them free medical services because a healthy citizen can contribute to the national development optimally. In many countries, people belong to a lower income group, so they don't have enough money to spend on expensive health facilities. People avoid visiting a professional practitioner in fear of expensive treatment. As a result, sometimes illness becomes aggressive and leads to death of the patient.
For example
, People in under-developed countries are facing
this
 serious issue of the lack of medical facilities. The government has all the power and finances to provide basic and advanced medical facilities to the common people, especially the poor.The government should make taxation and medical facilities, which are pro poor. The fully developed countries provide all types of medical services to their people. The developing and under developed countries should
also
 do the same. The private hospitals should
also
 be roped in providing medical facilities to the poor at affordable rates. There is no other solution to
this
 issue except the one I have discussed above. In conclusion, it can be said that only government should provide medical facilities to the poor and the other people. I WHOLEHEARTEDLY AGREE WITH IT.
Submitted by Ritu Joshi on

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