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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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The topic of banning the movement of personal automobiles on a specific
day
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 in every 30 days has always been debatable.
This
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advantages
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the advantages
 as well as disadvantages of not using private vehicles on
dedicated
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a dedicated day
day
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 monthly. To initiate with, the important benefit of car free
day
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 will be
time
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 for repair and maintenance of roadways. Because of
huge number
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the huge number
 of personal vehicles on roads, traffic jams are very
common and
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common, and
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 results into
improper fix
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an improper fix
 up of
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
. On
off
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off days
an off day
day
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,
municipality
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municipal
 workers can do restoration work without much interruption and can reduce the number of accidents due to water clogging and
pot holes
a pit or hole produced by wear or weathering (especially in a road surface)
potholes
 can be lowered.
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, other benefits could be we can save numerous ounces of our natural resources like petrol and diesel.
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 side, some possible drawbacks of
same
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the same
 could be
surge
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surging
 in the demand of public transport. As every individual will use the common bus or trains for travelling.
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 could lead to overcrowding and stampede.
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Therefore special
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Therefore, special
 arrangements should be planned to avoid fatalities.
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 to, communal transportation could be
time
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 consuming because one needs to follow the scheduled route and
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time table
a schedule listing events and the times at which they will take place
timetable
. In Big cities like Mumbai and Delhi, travel would be very difficult and tiring. To conclude all bits, merits of disallowing automobiles like on
time
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 overhauling of
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
, saving
environment
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the environment
 as we could control a lit bit of pollution
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.
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, to overcome all the demerits proper management and planning is must like increasing the frequency of public transport and introducing buses on shorter routes as well.
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