In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of helth and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Nowadays society is suffering with many

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an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning

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Major issue which is seen among masses recently that their

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size is increasing which is

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the other side, making

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it crucial challenges to maintain the

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essay I will discuss that what are various responsible reasons behind

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and will suggest some steps which needs to be considered to overcome the imperative concern about fitness

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Individuals are influenced to eat junk food which is not good for a human

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Since fast food is not cooked properly

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it is sold in open places normally. It contains dust and Some contaminated substances from open air

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effects

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an immune system of the individual when he eats and

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disturb the

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Apparently, they fell sick.

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, a recent report by

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the Human index department

that more than 30 percent persons are having a symptom of high blood pressure who eat dehydrated diet

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, professionals are working hard at work places which may

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a reason of becoming fat

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a daily

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, everyone should have to be more serious towards the

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the solution

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local authority

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the local authority

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the public to do yoga and some places should be allocated so that people get more interested to pursue

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all venders should be penalised if they sell

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food

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Canadian admin has lunched many programmes which guides to the eater for their health.

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a concerted effort

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issue completely. In conclusion, stiff work load and laziness toward the life and

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clear indication

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a clear indication

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It will be vanished if state and public work together to live smoothly.

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary lifestyle
high-fat, high-sugar, high-calorie foods
obesity
recreational facilities
emotional eating
cultural shift
convenient food options
physical activity levels
mental health issues
fast food

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