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In the future it seems more difficult to live on the earth. More money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. Do you agree or disagree?

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Living is altogether a struggle since the advent of mankind due to different reasons
such
 as availability of food, shelter, etc. But in the coming time, it looks like that it would be challenging to live on the Earth. Some believe that more budget should be consumed for research about the life presence on other planets
such
 as Mars. In my view, I disagree with
this
 viewpoint as even if we find life on other planets, humans would make it impossible to live there as well until mankind takes initiative to not to degrade the environment. Humans won't be flabbergasted to see that we destroy other inhabitable planets at burgeoning rates if people don't mould their mindset and start treating the nature with utmost respect. Earth used to be a great planet to live in, but when the humans showed up, it's downfall started. There are majority of issues which were originated by man,
for example
, global warming, pollution. Henceforth
,
Accept space
,
 it is not guaranteed to have suitable living surroundings on alien rocks after a few years. In my suggestion, more money should be poured in for the environment protection here on Earth only. Audacious steps need to be taken for the it's conservation. Many NGO's, locals and governments are taking necessary measures to stop baneful activities detrimental for our Earth.
For instance
, many small native tribes are gainsaying and fighting those multinationals who are trying to damage our planet for the sake of the company's profits. To conclude, I disagree to spend money to find life somewhere else as the results after some time would be same as what is produced on Earth,
instead
, it should be spent on saving and revamp Earth again.
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