Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the recent era, the modes of enjoyment for the masses is changing rapidly. The human beings celebrate almost all the functions together without any discrimination in the kind of festival. I firmly stand by the given viewpoint. In my piece of writing

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I shall shed light on

reasons

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the reasons

of my an agreement. More importantly, in the current time period, the people

only wants

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only want

are only wanting

to enjoy the various moments of the life, and perhaps, they only want to celebrate and cheer up their happiness.

For example

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, on Christmas day, all the mankind across the world likes to fill their 25 December night with fun and dance. The humans do not pay attention

toward

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the spiritual values and explore about the sacrifice

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which is done by Jesus Christ. So, the masses decorate the cake of the religious festivals with enjoyment sauce only.

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there

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they're

many and various traditional festivals exist in the every society. The old moments and culture is

pass

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passed

through one generation to another with the help of seasonal

occassions

something you have to do

occasions

occasion

, but, with the passage of time, the humans reflect the shadow of modernisation from the mirror of the old functions.

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, in India, the ways of

arrangments

the thing arranged or agreed to

arrangement

in the harvest fairs upgraded by new techniques

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which shift the mind compass of the people

toward

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dance on high beat only. I think

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the ways of celebration are greatly

impact

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impacting

the modern man and it provide dim light

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the historical and religious events.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

248 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Commercialization
Globalization
Cultural dilution
Traditional values
Secularization
Festivity
Heritage
Individualism vs. collectivism
Consumer culture
Intangible cultural heritage

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