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People no longer use newspapers and Television because the internet plays the same role. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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These days, people
use
internet
 more than before and they don’t
use
 newspapers and television a lot because everything there are in
internet
 and we can do all of our work.
For example
, news, movie and everything we did before with newspapers and television. There are many advantages for using
internet
. Almost most of the work can be done. Do Shopping, Payment of bills, connection with everyone and so on. So using the
internet
 is more comfortable for everyone.
On the other hand
, there are many disadvantages,
for instance
, when we can do anything with
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, we will be lazy and less active. I think it's good to
use
 the
Internet
 as long as it's not too extreme. We should not be dependent on the
Internet
 and we should try to
use
 television and newspapers sometimes.
As a result
, using the
internet
 is practical, but we must not allow ourselves to be distracted by other means of communication.
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