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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans. On the other hand, other argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various need, including uses for food and research. What is your opinion?

#people #animals #rights #humans #hand #food #research
IN THE COUNTRIES LIKE INDIA, A HUGE AMOUNT OF POPULATION IS THERE.MOST OF THE PEOPLE FEELS ANIMALS SHOULD NOT BE EXPLOITED BY HUMANS AND
ALSO
 HAVE SAME RIGHTS AS HUMANS. BUT TO ANOTHER POINT ANIMALS TO BE EMPLOYED FOR HUMAN SURVIVAL.
TO BEGIN
 WITH, ANIMALS IN THE SLAUGHTER HOUSE ARE TREATED VERY BADLY..ITS AWFUL THING FOR US
THAT IS
 HAPPENING.BUT IT IS
ALSO
 ACCEPTABLE THAT ANIMALS ARE KILLED BECAUSE CERTAINS TYPES OF VITAMINS, PROTEINS ETC ARE ESSENTIAL FOR HUMAN SURVIVAL.BUT THE ANIMALS THAT WERE KILL IN SLAUGHTER HOUSE ARE TREATED VERY BADLY..AS HUMAN DIDN'T SHOW CRUELTY AGAINST THEM.THE POINT IS THEY CAN
ALSO
 HAVE SAME RIGHTS AS HUMAN HAVE. TO STOP THESE UNCONDITIONAL THINGS THERE ARE SOME ORGANIZATION WHICH HELPS THE ANIMAL
SUCH
 AS PETA ORGANIZATION, PANJARAPOLE ETC. WHEREAS, ANIMALS ARE
ALSO
 BE USING FOR MEDICAL RESEARCH PURPOSE IN PRECLINICAL STUDIES FOR CURING THE DISEASE. BUT IN COSMECTICS DEVELOPMENT THERE IS UNNECESSARY KILLING OF HBLE ANIMALS...
NEVERTHELESS
 THE KILLING OF ANIMAL CAUSES A GREAT DISASTER TOWARDS HUMAN
SUCH
 AS CORONA the PANDEMIC.
LASTLY
 MY CONCLUSION IS THAT STEPS MUST BE TAKEN TOWARDS THESE COWARD HUMANS AND
ALSO
 FOR ANIMAL WELFARE RIGHTS ANIMALS ARE NOT OPTION, THEY ARE NECESSARY.
Submitted by Dhairya 1899 on

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