A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans. On the other hand, other argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various need, including uses for food and research. What is your opinion?

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IN THE COUNTRIES LIKE INDIA, A HUGE AMOUNT OF POPULATION IS THERE.MOST OF THE PEOPLE FEELS ANIMALS SHOULD NOT BE EXPLOITED BY HUMANS AND

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HAVE SAME RIGHTS AS HUMANS. BUT TO ANOTHER POINT ANIMALS TO BE EMPLOYED FOR HUMAN SURVIVAL.

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WITH, ANIMALS IN THE SLAUGHTER HOUSE ARE TREATED VERY BADLY..ITS AWFUL THING FOR US

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HAPPENING.BUT IT IS

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ACCEPTABLE THAT ANIMALS ARE KILLED BECAUSE CERTAINS TYPES OF VITAMINS, PROTEINS ETC ARE ESSENTIAL FOR HUMAN SURVIVAL.BUT THE ANIMALS THAT WERE KILL IN SLAUGHTER HOUSE ARE TREATED VERY BADLY..AS HUMAN DIDN'T SHOW CRUELTY AGAINST THEM.THE POINT IS THEY CAN

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HAVE SAME RIGHTS AS HUMAN HAVE. TO STOP THESE UNCONDITIONAL THINGS THERE ARE SOME ORGANIZATION WHICH HELPS THE ANIMAL

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AS PETA ORGANIZATION, PANJARAPOLE ETC. WHEREAS, ANIMALS ARE

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BE USING FOR MEDICAL RESEARCH PURPOSE IN PRECLINICAL STUDIES FOR CURING THE DISEASE. BUT IN COSMECTICS DEVELOPMENT THERE IS UNNECESSARY KILLING OF HBLE ANIMALS...

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THE KILLING OF ANIMAL CAUSES A GREAT DISASTER TOWARDS HUMAN

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AS CORONA the PANDEMIC.

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MY CONCLUSION IS THAT STEPS MUST BE TAKEN TOWARDS THESE COWARD HUMANS AND

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FOR ANIMAL WELFARE RIGHTS ANIMALS ARE NOT OPTION, THEY ARE NECESSARY.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

198 words

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