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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the recent days, the
super market
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarket
 should produce local
food
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 products while not the external imported items. I completely agree with
this
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 point of view. As the local
food
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 products provide a lot of
advance
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advances
 in human life. On the one hand, local products play a significant role
on
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in
of
 each and everyone's life. They provide a full of natural
flavor
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavour
 and
nutrients which
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nutrients, which
 is helpful to
human body
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the human body
.
Moreover
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,
this
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 helps the economy
.
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.
For instance
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, producing local products from agriculture is
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 directly sold
to
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in
the the
definite article
the
 local market without any
presevatives
tending or having the power to preserve
preservatives
preservative
 and added colours.
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, these items are safe and healthy
.
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.
On the other hand
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, Market store selling imported
food
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 products cause complications for the people.
Firstly
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, youths get addicted to the
food
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 items.
For example
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, kid's intake a lot of these preserved
food
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 which
inturn
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in turn
 cause a health upset and results in many disorders.
Secondly
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, there items are stored and packed for a long period of time, so it's not fresh and contains
presevatives
tending or having the power to preserve
preservatives
. In results
to
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in
 illness for the people. To encapsulate, it's always a better idea to sell local products than imported products, as it does not cause any side effects to the individual in the country
.
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.
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