The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel ( gas and oil). To what extent do you agree and or disagree.  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Nowadays, the whole world is affected by two main problems which are gas and oil. Personally, I agree that the international community must
to find
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find
a solution to reduce the consumption of fossil fuel in all nations.
First
and foremost, the pollution is a huge problem talked in the
last
decades. We can consider that the big cities are the most affected places
for
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in
examples New York in the USA
,
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,
Tokyo in Japan, Rome in Italy and more and more.
This
is due to people that prefer to
use
cars
,
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,
motorbike and scooters
instead
of taking bikes or going for a walk. The majority of people choose to
use
that kind of transport only because they feel more comfortable and safe. But we all know that transports have
fews
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fewer
benefits but
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benefits, but
a lot of damage. One of the biggest damage is to produce a lot of
toxics
of or relating to or caused by a toxin or poison
toxic
fumes and smokes that will impact to the people causing health problems and to the animals too. For these reasons I believe that the international community have to intervene and reduce gas and oil.
Secondly
, all the gases have a huge impact
also
to the nature. The air pollution need to be reduced in order to get alive people
,
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,
animals and plants. Due to these smokes the climate change day by day. So we have to reduce the production of all these
gases
an occurrence of something
cases
. In my own experience
,
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,
I can say that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am very lucky because I live in a little region up to the mountain. Here the air is fresh and the majority of people
use
busses and bikes to get around the region.
This
because all we need is
too
in the direction of
to
close from us and we can
use
this
kind of transportation to reach the
desire
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desired
place.
However
,
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,
I think that transportation
such
as cars or motorbikes are useful to move from one place to another that are not easy to reach by walk or by bike. For that reason I suggest that the automotive companies have to product only electric transport in order to reduce the consumption of fossil fuel and to
salve
find the solution to (a problem or question) or understand the meaning of
solve
our problem. In conclusion, I believe that the world
have
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has
is having
to be changed right now with new and innovative means of transport
such
as electric ones.
This
will
benefits
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benefit
all the
words but
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words, but
at the same time
also
animals and plants.
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