The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel ( gas and oil). To what extent do you agree and or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays, the whole world is affected by two main problems which are gas and oil. Personally, I agree that the international community must

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a solution to reduce the consumption of fossil fuel in all nations.

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and foremost, the pollution is a huge problem talked in the

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decades. We can consider that the big cities are the most affected places

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examples New York in the USA

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Tokyo in Japan, Rome in Italy and more and more.

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is due to people that prefer to

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cars

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motorbike and scooters

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of taking bikes or going for a walk. The majority of people choose to

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that kind of transport only because they feel more comfortable and safe. But we all know that transports have

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benefits but

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benefits, but

a lot of damage. One of the biggest damage is to produce a lot of

toxics

of or relating to or caused by a toxin or poison

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fumes and smokes that will impact to the people causing health problems and to the animals too. For these reasons I believe that the international community have to intervene and reduce gas and oil.

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, all the gases have a huge impact

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to the nature. The air pollution need to be reduced in order to get alive people

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animals and plants. Due to these smokes the climate change day by day. So we have to reduce the production of all these

gases

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. In my own experience

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I can say that

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am very lucky because I live in a little region up to the mountain. Here the air is fresh and the majority of people

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busses and bikes to get around the region.

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because all we need is

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kind of transportation to reach the

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I think that transportation

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as cars or motorbikes are useful to move from one place to another that are not easy to reach by walk or by bike. For that reason I suggest that the automotive companies have to product only electric transport in order to reduce the consumption of fossil fuel and to

salve

find the solution to (a problem or question) or understand the meaning of

solve

our problem. In conclusion, I believe that the world

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to be changed right now with new and innovative means of transport

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as electric ones.

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animals and plants.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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398 words

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