In many countries schools have serve problems with students behaviour .what do you think are the cause of this? what solution can you suggest?

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Education is the process which aids
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learning, acquiring
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knowledge and skills to character of one's but
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the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
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a number of
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institutions
have several problems regarding the pupil behaviour
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reasons
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tendency and I hold a firm convention that people should take some immediate steps to tackle
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there are a number of reasons that why children's show
misbehavior
improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
in front of the
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teachers.
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is that the poor discipline at home is the main phenomenon to show the poor rule in
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by children's.The lack of attention from the parents and teachers, leads to change the way of talking and activities in the daily routine
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These situations happened because many mother's and father's do not have the time or skills required to
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teach
their young ones the value of manner and respecting authorities
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results
that many students not listening to their teachers
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being a rude and across the rules and regulations of their schools
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, a competitive and comparison based education structure
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creates
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discriminatory
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There are several
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solutions
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firstly
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school
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management should have taken steps to terminate
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this issue
these issues
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school
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a school
the school
should be changed and reduce the difference between the intelligent and week students as well as
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a teacher
teachers
should be friendly and relate
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students in class discussions.
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parents
the parent
should try to give proper time to their children and help them to being well behaved with
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staff and with other students
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but not least it is not easy solved by the students
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parents and teachers have tried to mitigate these complications
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imparted
impart knowledge to their pupils and help to change their behaviour
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. To conclude, widespread the negative behaviour in the classroom has been caused by primary education not installing the values of defence and civility of their
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offspring, however
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can be tackled through
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a public education programme
the public education programme
public education programmes
that promotes these values
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also recommend
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also recommends
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that people should
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attend
parenting classes before their child starts kindergarten
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