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Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours, and they feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

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Introduction
In the
resent
new
recent
 days, many individual tend to perform extra working hours,
also
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 experience more pressure than previously. There are several reasons contributing to
this
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 problem, as well as
potentionally
with a possibility of becoming actual
potentially
 drastic long term effect.
Body · 1
To begin
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 with,
cirrent
a flow of electricity through a conductor
current
 situation of
corona
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the corona
are
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is
 the major cause for the expected longer working hours.
For example
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,
Accept space
,
 as people tend to
work
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 at
work
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, due to
effect
Suggestion
the effect
 of lockdown.
Body · 2
Employees have
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
 forced to
work
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 for a prolonged time.
Moreover
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,
this
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 is causing
employee
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 to
perfom
carry out or perform an action
perform
 more than
a
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an
 expected working hours, resulting in emphasize
for
Suggestion
to
 the
employess
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
.
Accept space
.
Furthermore
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, they are able to provide much time for their family, friends, and loved ones.
Body · 3
On the other end, employees need to follow a strict working hours and deduce the stress.
Body · 4
For Instance
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,
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employee
Suggestion
the employee
an employee
 can do daily
exxercice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
 and walking in the garden, which helps them get out of their worry. Resulting in peace and
healthly
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 life style.
Body · 5
Similarly
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, spending
amount
Suggestion
the amount
an amount
 of time with the young children and listen to some music,
also
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 helps the
employee
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 to reduce stress and stay
calmn
not agitated; without losing self-possession
calm
.
Conclusion
To summarize,
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employee
Suggestion
employees
the employee
sholuld
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 follow the specific
work
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 timing and stay
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 peace and healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job market
  • higher expectations
  • pressure
  • constant connectivity
  • economic instability
  • work-life balance
  • demanding job roles
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • flexible working hours
  • wellness programs
  • stress management
  • mental health support
  • regular breaks
  • vacation time
  • burnout
  • positive work environment
  • team-building activities
  • open communication
  • career development
  • skill enhancement
  • employee morale
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