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Our personalities are pre-determined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often debated that an individual's behaviour is pre-defined before their birth, but every individual is born with its different traits.
This
 essay will argue that how a person etiquette is defined before it is born and how it can be altered. Many parents assume that what personality their unborn child will posses. Following
this
, there are certain qualities which a person gets through its genes and those are the qualities which define them. According to a recent study by Harvard University,
majority
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majoring
 traits of a child
is carried
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are carried
 from their respective parents.
For example
, if either of the parents are short-tempered it is natural to have that quality in his
/
her child.
On the other hand
, it is rightly said that every individual is born with his
/
her own
trait
the passage to the stomach and lungs; in the front part of the neck below the chin and above the collarbone
throat
 which define them. A person’s behaviour and persona can be changed. Certain qualities in an individual
varies
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vary
 a lot from their parents.
This
 is because of
people
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the people
 he
/
she
are surrounded
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is surrounded
with
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by
 and
/
or the way they are taught. A recent survey by the Oxford University, 7 out of 10 people’s
trait
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traits
 is varied from what their parents possess.
Majority
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The majority
 of these people changed their negative traits to a positive one. To conclude, even though a person’s behaviour is pre-decided before their birth, it is in their will whether he
/
she want to change their traits for their own betterment or no.
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