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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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It is considered by some people that putting everything in the proper position in our home or workplace is very considerable and
this
 matter is recognized as a discipline among the people. I partially agree with
this
 notion due to the fact that I am not a kind of person who is very organized. The truth is that considering commodities in the correct place are the best way to keep your home or workplace very clear and tidy and the majority of time, you do not need to search for something for a long period of time. In fact, through
this
 method we have easy access to everything without any trouble and whatever we need is just on our fingertips. What is more,
this
 issue has an affirmative impact on our brains at
first
, colleagues, family, and so on. To illustrate, if we are a self-employee and have a store, it can be easy for customers to purchase something from us or even in our home at the moment when we have a guest, it can be a harmonious atmosphere for
this
 person with
this
 activity.
On the other hand
, as I am a little lazy, it is very intricate for me to organize everything which are related to me, especially my clothes.
In other words
, I would like to live freely without any restriction and
this
 item is partially
in contrast
 with my mindset.
Furthermore
, my parents raised me well and gave me a good education in many ways, but sometimes, circumstances do not go according to plan and it can happen to anyone and I have lived without any scheme until today and I am pretty sure that there are many people in the world like myself and these people are enthusiastic to live according to their rules and most of the time, they are very stubborn about everything and it is very complicated for people who live or work with them. In conclusion, I have the opinion that discipline is very vital in all situations, but sometimes, it can be tedious or problematic for people like myself.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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