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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the Internet, museums are not needed anymore to what extent. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, most
information
 can be found on the
internet
. Because of which, some believe that museums have become unnecessary as most of the things about culture and history can be found online.
This
 essay will explain why having museums are extremely important despite
internet
 providing all the knowledge.
To begin
 with,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 contains a lot of
information
 about everything because of which
musuems
a depository for collecting and displaying objects having scientific or historical or artistic value
museums
 have become unpopular these days. One of the reasons for
this
 is that
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 provides a very detailed knowledge about all cultural and historical events.
For example
,
information
 about World War II might not be found in a particular
museum but it can
Suggestion
museum, but it can
 be easily available at a click of a button.
Secondly
, people think visiting
museum
Suggestion
the museum
 is a waste of money as the same
information
 which they might get over there is available free of cost online. If anything is easily available online why to waste money and time visiting a
museum
.
Nevertheless
,
musuems
a depository for collecting and displaying objects having scientific or historical or artistic value
museums
 provide practical knowledge about all the events which have happened centuries ago, as it contains historical items and evidence from the earlier societies which the
internet
 cannot provide.
Moreover
, having museums will boost the economy of the country as more tourists and locals will be visiting them.
For instance
, most people visit Greece to explore
musuems
a depository for collecting and displaying objects having scientific or historical or artistic value
museums
 across the country which in turn improve the nation's economy. Because of these
reasons
Suggestion
reason
internet
 cannot replace the
musuems
Suggestion
museum's
.
This
 essay explained the importance of having museums, even when
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 can provide all the
information
. In my opinion, the
internet
 cannot provide the practicality or the experience which one might get from visiting a
museum
 and
also museums are
Suggestion
museums are also
 extremely important for a country's tourism.
Submitted by DRISHTI SOBTI on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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