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Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss these two views and give your opinion.

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Some say that it is better for young males and females to
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 in different
schools
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,
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 others believe they should
study
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 in co-educational
schools
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 studying in different
schools
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 reduces
cases
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 of sexual harassment, in my opinion attending the same
schools
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 increases their confidence towards other
genders
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. On the one hand,
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 of sexual bullying are reduced drastically.
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 is because students do not have direct interaction with other
genders
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 in
schools
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, which reduces sexual harassment
cases
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, in research, it was found that girls face at least eighty per cent fewer sexual bullying
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 when they
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 in single-sex
schools
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.
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, I believe that
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 can be controlled with the help of strict rules and regulations by the school management.
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, studying with other
genders
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 helps children to boost their confidence towards others.
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 is because they interact, communicate and play with opposite-gender children, and
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, they feel more confident
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 interacting with them after completing their studies.
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, many governments around the world allow only a co-educational environment since it lets
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 know each other and reduces differences among them.
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, in my opinion, co-educational
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 help the young generation to know their opposite gender
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 they do not feel shy in front of them. In conclusion, it is being argued that single-sex
schools
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 are better for studying,
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 others think that students should
study
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 in co-educational
schools
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. Even though single-gender
schools
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 reduce
cases
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 of sexual harassment, I think that co-educational
schools
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 help students increase their confidence towards other
genders
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.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that every paragraph has a clear main idea, supported by relevant details, explanations, and examples.
task achievement
Avoid repeating the same reason in different words, instead develop a wider range of ideas and arguments.
coherence cohesion
Use a clear, logical structure to organise your essay into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each body paragraph should have a clear central topic.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion should effectively summarise your argument and restate your opinion clearly.
task achievement
To effectively respond to the task, provide a balanced discussion of both views before expressing your own. Make sure to do this within the body paragraphs.
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