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the media shouls limit how much bad news they report because it discourages people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people have an opinion that the media should be selective in reporting negative news as it
demotivates
 people to do even the minute tasks.
This
 essay agrees with the above statement as these days people believe on news feedback more than personal experiences. In today's world media plays a pivotal role in shaping the
pyschology
the science of mental life
psychology
 of
many
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
. Whatever is served in the form of information directly impacts the behaviour of people.
For example
, the exaggerated opinions about Amazon forest resists many to have a tour within the forest
.
Accept space
.
However personal
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However, personal
 reviews from Bob Kelly, the famous photographer of Natgeo life, says that it is adventurous to be there rather than fatal. Many
media advertisers
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media, advertisers
 are paid huge for publicising information that could be detrimental to the image of someone.
For instance
, to downplay
Hayatt
 resorts in Huntington, Ramada resort paid advertiser's to show that Ramada is accessible through an easy route unlike
Hayatt
a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature
heat
 which serves the hilly terrain with an
accidental
Suggestion
accident
 prone zone. Not all drivers showed up for
Hayatt
a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature
heat
 after watching
this
 news. It led to a decrease in the customer base of
Hayatt
. In conclusion,
media
Suggestion
the media
 should avoid
majority
Suggestion
the majority
a majority
 of bad news as it demoralise the mass. Rather, they should advertise ways to be more vigilant.
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