Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, countries with a high budget, try to help lower ones out, by providing them with money, but

this

is not enough when it comes to solving poverty.

However

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other people argue that, rich countries should give another type of help, rather than financial option. I completely agree with

this

idea, and in

this

essay I will support my opinion with examples.

Firstly

, developed countries shouldn't provide funding, they should offer a range of working opportunities

instead

, which could increase the economic failure of the poorer countries.

Such

initiatives can help to prevent low income and in

this

way, people can live a great and a life free of stress.

For example

, they could provide sponsorships, by building IT centres, factories and give all the citizens the opportunity to learn and to attend free preparation courses, so

then

, to be able to have a full-time job. Another reason why I agree, is because apart from giving money, well equipped countries could offer free medicine centres, among with highly prepared nurses and doctors, provide free education programs and establish scholarships so that parents are encouraged to educate their children.

For instance

, they could provide bursaries and the chance to study abroad as a change of experience at least for a year.

However

, some people argue that money would be enough, and a country should manage its corruption and provide everyone equal rights. In conclusion, I believe that developed countries can boost the economy of a low income country, by helping it with all the necessary things, free of charge.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

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258 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
technical assistance
expertise
infrastructure
education
fair trade
trade barriers
sustainable development
environmental conservation

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