In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their leaves of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Obesity and

health

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a big issue

big issues

in the world

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Numerous nationals are facing trouble with increasing size in the body which lead them more

dieases

an internal-combustion engine that burns heavy oil

diesels

diseases

doses

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I believe that eating unnecessarily foods which human cannot digest and not serious toward the body is main causes which can be overcome by applying a least efforts

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world has more competition so professional has less time to take care

health

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They eat junk

foods many

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foods, many

times which

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times, which

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effect

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the human 's physics in

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the future

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Other side masses are not doing exercise on daily which have been effected them badly

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older

ager had done proper

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resulted them of symptom free life

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how kids can sustain the responsibilities

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if their immune system is not capable.

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society

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

Society

has made interest in dehydrated

diet which

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diet, which

lead them more

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implications

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problem can be solved. If

government

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the government

implements some efforts.

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state

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the state

shoud

expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something

should

facilitate the awards to those who win latest campaigns about

health

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, manufacturers who are selling contaminated food or following the worst process while making products at plants must be penalised.

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Canada's admin banned the 20 units in its region since they were adhered the wrong practice for the mankind

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merely individual can not detract an spreading issue which could be pushed by putting concerted efforts

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In conclusion, undoubtedly every day more men and women

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are admitted

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the

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hospital, but

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major problem can be avoided by amalgamation inputs

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary lifestyle
calorie consumption
food desert
health disparity
nutritional education
genetic predisposition
metabolism
processed foods
public health policy
infrastructure
health promotion
awareness campaigns
dietary habits
lifestyle diseases

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