What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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In
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day and age, people, especially the young generation from distant regions are starting to leave for bigger and more developed towns. That’s perhaps because they think that they will have better chances for their careers. I wholly back up the idea and in the essay, I would argue that there were benefits and
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drawbacks when living in a rural locality. In my view, there were three crucial positive aspects.
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, due to a limited population, crimes
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has been
usually manageable.
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, people in the countryside tended not to stringently protect their properties like citizens, which let them pay attention and money to other concerns.
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, the living cost was not high and as a consequence
villagers
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villager
did not have to work diligently and could spend more time with their beloved ones.
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,
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would help family members form a stronger relationship and they would support each other whenever they had difficulties. As far as I am concerned, many of the advantages were poor infrastructure.
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would undoubtedly lead to poor education. For
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reason, children were not able to go to school to develop skills and broaden knowledge. They would be exactly like their parents: Grow up to be a peasant or farmer and live like that for the rest of their lives. Low infrastructure
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caused poor
health-care
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
systems, which substantially lowered the chance of surviving severe diseases.
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, it took a lot of time and effort to get to the markets for supplies, electronic devices, or manufactured materials. All in all, there were pros and cons of living in remote areas.
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, in my point of view, we should not be limited to any small community because the world outside is captivating and has many things to discover.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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