some people believe that teaching children at home is the best for child development while others think it is important to go to school discuss both advantageous and giving your own opinion

It is proposed that online learning
are
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is
the most beneficial for academic progress for children
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However
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some people reckon that teaching in
school
is essential
To begin
with, it is undeniable that new technology has
profound contribution
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a profound contribution
for
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in
to
shaping our life style
in particular
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,
home learning provides a lot of benefits
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First
and foremost, it allows more flexibility in time schedule of classes which is why students with
on line
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
learning have
capability
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the capability
to have part time work simultaneously with studying.
Second
, the lessons are tailored to suit the children ability and skills
similarly
, advanced students can alter the pace of lessons in order to finalize the course sooner or to incorporate difficult subjects so as to challenge themselves.
Last
but not the least,
such
sort of learning will be effective for families are living far away from
school
or they relocate on a frequent basis.
On the other hand
, no doubt, learning in
school
has numerous benefits.
firstly
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Firstly
, it allows the student to interact with their classmates with doing a lot of project arts and participating physical exercises in order to develop social
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emotional and linguistically skills
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Secondly
, there is immediate feedback
for
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from
the teachers on their academic progress in
school
and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Besides
, how to improve the weakness
points conjunction with the
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points in conjunction with the
parents.
Lastly
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,
school
aren’t only targeted to impart
basic curriculum
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a basic curriculum
to
students but
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students, but
also
to share
experience
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experiences
and to develop skills that are beneficial to students later on
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From my point of view, I believe that attending
school
is
mandatory especially
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mandatory, especially
in
the earlier
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the early
the earliest
stage of education,
otherwise
, if there are certain circumstances prohibiting us for attending
school
, they will drive us for
alternative approach
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alternative approaches
an alternative approach
of online learning
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To sum up
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both types of learning are effective and confirmed they will achieve high scores and highly academic progress.
However
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school
learning
are
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is
effective for the personal growth of children.
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