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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree. What other measures do you think might be effective

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
It has been suggested that many
traffic
 jams and
car
 accidents happens because, of the
prise
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
perils
 of petrol is very cheap. While, to do prise
expensivly
high in price or charging high prices
expensive
expensively
 to solve these
problems
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problems, however
however
, many people want to buy and
drive
 different cars as,
this
 is a dream of all men and women in the current time. To my mind, many people buy some cars at least 2 or 3 different
one
,
Accept space
,
and they want to be
reachest
Suggestion
the richest
richest
richer
reached
racist
 person among their co-workers and relatives, but, they
can not
can not
cannot
 understand that they do not let others to
drive
 free,
as a result
, they
are contribute
Suggestion
are contributing
have contributed
are to contribute
 different
traffic
 jams and other
one
. I think not only to buy many cars contribute various
car
accident
Suggestion
accidents
,
Accept space
,
furthermore
, many people have bad driving habits, they have
drived
compelled forcibly by an outside agency
driven
derived
thrived
reclessly
in a reckless manner
recklessly
 and of course speed.
Furthermore
, many people permitted to
thier
of them or themselves
their
tear
 adults to
drive
car
Suggestion
a car
the car
 without driving license or they do not want
give
Suggestion
to give
 them
different driving course
Suggestion
a different driving course
 because of, they do not want to spend their money.
Furthermore
, they teach to
drive
 themselves
instead
 of, give them to
learen
gain knowledge or skills
learn
Loren
driving
Suggestion
to drive
 from different professional
car
 drivers.
As a result
, every day we can see many
car
 accidents. I think government should pay attention. To my mind, every family should buy
one
car
 not many or every member of
one
.
In addition
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should build many bridges as much as possible as, some cars can not
weit
Suggestion
we it
 in the
traffic
 jam when during the driving suddenly start
traffic
 jam it can be harm for
ambulance
Suggestion
an ambulance
the ambulance
 or
this
 kind of cars as, in these cars can be
diffirent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 ill people or ding
one
. To conclude, the government should do petrol
,
Accept space
,
 not expensive
,
Accept space
,
but they need to do
them
of them or themselves
their
 energetic or with
battary
group of guns or missile launchers operated together at one place
battery
 and at present they
can to solve
Suggestion
can solve
 all problems which related to the
car
 accident,
traffic
 jam or air pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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