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smacking children is the best form of discipline. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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How to prepare the children in the discipline manner for the future, is a hot topic now-a-day. Some parents believe that physical punishments are the most effective way to raise children in the discipline.
This
 essay will argue why beating the children is really
a
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an
 awful way for their better growth; mentally and physically.
Firstly
, Parents has always been worried about their children to behave correctly, whereas, They prefer the way of smack them to acknowledge the mistake and remember in the long run.
However
, the Disciple can be taught by punishing the children on their mistakes, in order to over calm their mistakes or tantrums.
Moreover
, children will remember their mistakes for
next
 time because of the fear of getting punished, they will not repeat it. To exemplify, when children's handwriting is poor, their parents often hit on their hands to fear them to write properly.
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Finally
, In order to make them realise their mistakes parents have to bet youngsters.
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On
 the other hand, Despite of the fact that parents are responsible for their young one's behaviour,
although
, giving harsh punishments and torturing them may lead to various mental disorders and physical disability.
For instance
, Studies have shown that some of the parents bet their children to release their own anger and stress.
Moreover
, when children make mistakes rather, try to use reverse psychology. In fact, Smacking the children is not only unnecessary, but has become illegal in many major countries. In conclusion,
This
 essay argued that why smacking children are entirely inappropriate for the good behaviour of the children. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the fact that parents should smack their kids, it is not only a crime, as well as, it makes them feel less important,
consequently
, it may cause a mental condition and distract them to become a responsible adult in future.
Submitted by kamal on

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