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Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

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Nowadays, Stress becomes the part of everyone’s life. But the excessive stress in the workplace is kind of hard for many of us to bear, where employers play a key role to pressurise their employees to achieve targets.
This
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 essay will highlight the problems and solutions to the workplace issues.
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, there are fewer jobs in the market as compared to
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the number
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 of job seekers. So to minimise or avoid the chance of getting fired, employees are put into the situation of excessive workload.
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 results out to be
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the lack
a lack
 of security and jobs.
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, wages of the workers are much lesser than the
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 done by them, which
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 affects them physically and emotionally.
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, there is the considerate percentage of the population who are working just to earn their daily bread and due to less career opportunity; they only have the option to
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 in
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 a devastating environment. Moving forward, employers are expecting their employees to
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 excessively just to accomplish their
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 goals and that too in a limited time period. Many companies are having bad or worst infrastructure which is
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 a cause for the burden for individuals working there
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 as poor seating arrangements,
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 sanitation, improper ventilation of
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the workplace
 and many more. There are several numbers of initiatives that
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employers
the employer
 can take to ease their life. They can provide them with the paid holidays once a year,
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 will boost their lifestyle to
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.
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 to it, they can limit the hours of
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 so that it will no longer be a burden for them or can ask them to
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 from home after some limit. Reviewing their performance from time to time and appreciating their
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 is another solution to it. One of the most important solutions to it is to match the job requirement with the candidate’s skill as it will not pressurise him/her to complete the task for which they are not suitable. In the nutshell, balancing the
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 life
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 the only initiative of the employer will boost their lifestyle as well as contributes towards the accomplishment to targets.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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