Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflects the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

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Nowadays, there is no doubt advertising has a great impact
on sales increasing
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on increasing sales
. I agree that some big and not big brands are often sold without any necessity
on
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for
them. But does advertising really have so much influence on people`s consciousness? Advertising takes
significant part
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a significant part
in our life. We are surrounded by it everywhere. Sometimes advertising
help
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helps
us to discover the new wares on the market, to make
choices but
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choices, but
sometimes it leads to buying of unnecessary things.
For example
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,
TV-production market
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the TV - production market
always makes progress. Now the manufacturers offer TV-sets with 4K option, which gets trendy. Despite the fact that there are no channels and less films supporting
this
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option, people tend to replace their old devices. It is the visual example of marketing power.
Nevertheless
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, I consider that
goods
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good
promotion does not have so many
effect
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effects
as they think. It
does not makes
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does not make
customer purchase needless
wares
the waging of armed conflict against an enemy
wars
. The main number of people bye
for example
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new car because of economical reason: new car needs less maintenance. Others find new cars gorgeous. The
third
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wants to keep up with the times. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
would say that
although
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many people are under
influence
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the influence
of advertising, the key aspect of
goods
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good
choice remains people`s needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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