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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this. How can this problem be overcome.

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People find it difficult to balance their work. The professional activity and real growth are like two parallel lines. Problems shouldn'
t
 be intercepted in between, People sometimes misjudge balancing heart, they take sitting idle and relaxing on the sofa, watching television etc. To discharge their stress. But that won'
t
 help and people start becoming frustrated for staying in a cubicle,
This
 cubicle can be an office or a house. There are many ways to overcome
this
 problem which totally depends on person to person. Some people have hobbies like cooking, singing, playing some sports etc. Which is a clemency tremendous stress and a positive sign for their physical as well as mental health. The other idea is to take a break or a vacation and explore some new places.
This
 will play crucial importance in their growth. Giving some time to family, friends, and relatives
also
 help to share ideas as conversation is another way to discharge weight. Many times, people lose their temper in small things and remain frustrate with their life.
This
 doesn'
t
 mean because of their nature, but because of their work pressure they are facing. Staying dumb, shouting at others, self-destruction, negative thoughts etc. Are some of the symptoms we observe when people are trapped with
such
 problems. There may be many examples of
such
 kind of persons in our growth, who is facing
such
 difficulties. At the end, life wasn'
t
 meant to be easy. One should find their own weight release and based on that, time should be given. By
this
 way, one can keep a balance in their work and their life,
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