Some people argue that usage of technology (Mobile technology) is not helping for people to socialize Do you Agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
technology
is very important for our life. We can do whatever we want with only a click.
For
example
, we can call our parents and friends, we can send messages and
use
different types of apps and Networks
such
as Facebook, Instangram, Snapchat and Twitter. Compare to the past, now we are very lucky, but I think
this
involves not socializing. In
this
essay, I will give my point of view about
this
theme.
First
and foremost, we can call our new world as a technological
one
. People
use
technology
every day and every single hour.
For
example
, people
use
it for work, for school, for travel, for sport. I think people are affected by
this
huge problem. I believe, it is an issue because
this
involves to not socialize compare to the past. We communicate only by mobile phone or computer. On
one
hand,
technology
is good to get in touch with people far from you.
For
example
, when I was in California a could
use
Skype to video call or send messages to my parents.
On the other hand
, I think
technology
cause a social distancing.
For
example
, is very bad to see a group of friends eating in a restaurant all together, but every single person looks on their phone and they don't talk to each other. To conclude, in the twenty
one
century
technology
is
one
of the biggest problems in the world. I know that people can't live without it, but I think we can improve the way we
use
it. We need to communicate face to face and not from ours screen.
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