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According to a recent study, the more time people use the Internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world- wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. How far do you agree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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In
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 modern era, it is evident that the
internet
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 plays a tremendous role in connecting the people globally through social media platforms.
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, I strongly agree that the
internet
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 is a way to explore your world-wide, but there is
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 no doubt in saying that it's
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 affecting the social interactions between the living beings. The
internet
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 contains a bunch of benefits in terms of increasing communications.
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, it has an individual connected with all parts of the world. A person sitting in one corner of an area can easily be reached for another at some different part of the world.
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, earlier we used to interact through calls and letters which were less expensive source of the channel. Innovation of technology removes the long channel and expensive barrier of transmission. Social media
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 as Facebook, emails, WhatsApp and many more changed the interaction to
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the next level
 and just with the support of
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. It basically cleared the way of broadcasting.
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, along with the several benefits, it
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 included major disadvantages as well, especially in terms of social inter connectivity. As we noticed that nowadays, children or youngsters are least bothered about anyone sitting
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 to them or lives in their neighbourhood when they're involved in online chats or games. They are mainly interested in online life rather than real life. Devoting more time online makes them couch potato as they are less bothered for playing outside and interacting with the families and friends, In the nutshell, with the advantages of increasing communication levels, social interaction
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 get affected.
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, it depends upon a person that how he balances both to get results.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital era
  • Social isolation
  • Cyberspace
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Global village
  • Virtual reality
  • Remote connections
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Digital divide
  • Cyber-socialization
  • Screen time
  • Online networking
  • Physical disconnection
  • Social dynamics
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