Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
‘An apple a day keeps the doctor away’, a proverb since beginning of time that promotes ‘prevention is better than cure’.
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budget ought to be directed towards implementation of nationwide education and preventive Use synonyms
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steps. While the idea might seem a bit far-fetched, I completely side with the execution of Use synonyms
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approach.
Prevention is fruitful in the long run. Linking Words
Firstly
, from an economic point of view, it benefits both the individual and the government; as much of the fees spent Linking Words
on
diagnostics, surgeries and medicines would be reduced. Suggestion
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For instance
, breast cancer is a common form of cancer amongst females over the age of 40. Linking Words
However
, many women, especially in undeveloped countries, don’t approach the doctor until a later stage, due to lack of knowledge in the matter. Linking Words
Thus
, resulting in a number of expensive tests, treatments and insurance money. Yet, yearly mammogram provided by the government for middle-aged women can help in early identification and reduction of Linking Words
such
exorbitant costs.
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, rigorous measures can result in decreased mortality rate, healthier people and more productive citizens. To exemplify, governmental publicity campaigns illustrating the ill effects of smoking, drinking, not brushing your teeth and Linking Words
overconsumption
of fast-foods, can urge the people to take better care of themselves. Suggestion
over consumption
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, certain road-side slogans Linking Words
such
as: ‘Don’t drink and drive, your furry friend will not understand why you didn’t return’, acting on Linking Words
emotional side
of drivers can have a tremendous positive impact.
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the emotional side
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,
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the face
prevention
or reduction of many dreadful diseasesSuggestion
the prevention
;
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Covid-19, hepatitis and AIDS. According to an independent online survey in Accept space
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,
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the public’s awareness, but
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decreased number
of people approaching Suggestion
a decreased number
health
facilities.
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budget towards preventive Suggestion
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health
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